The Green Lady
by Lex Valentine
The cemetery staff held their annual Halloween carnival on the 31st because it fell on a Saturday. The cemetery was closed, but the parking lot was decorated with spooky props. Costumed people were laughing and partaking of carnival food like corndogs. In the distance, the faint glow of the headstones seemed like part of the décor.
Eden’s costume was dark green velvet. However, the top of the dress was cut so low it barely covered her nipples. The skirt was short in the front, and the tops of her stockings and garter belt peeped out occasionally. The green velvet tapered to a long train in the back.
When her co-workers asked what she was, she replied, “The green lady. You know, the cemetery’s ghost.”
They laughed, thinking she’d been diabolically clever in her choice of costume. Eden wasn’t sure that was the case. After all, she’d had to explain it to them. With a sigh, she stuck her corn dog in the trash and decided she’d had enough.
Walking to her car, she saw a figure in the shadows near a private mausoleum. The figure beckoned urgently. Curious, she turned toward the small stone structure. As she neared the mausoleum, a hand touched her arm. Startled, she turned, her eyes meeting the electric blue ones of a man with long dark hair falling around a model handsome face.
“Finally. You’ve come,” he murmured.
“What the hell?” Eden exclaimed.
He pressed a finger to her lips, then bent to kiss her. Bolts of lust shot through her, causing heat to pool between her thighs. Her knees buckled, but he picked her up, carrying her into the mausoleum. When the metal door closed, he propped her against the marble crypts.
“Who are you?” she panted.
“The answer to your prayers, green lady,” he whispered.
His lips sought hers again, his tongue sliding against hers. Eden’s breath caught, then she kissed him back. Never had a man made her feel like this. She was shivering, her arousal full blown. Her panties were soaked through, and she could feel her clit throbbing, aching for his touch.
Giving in to the onslaught of lust, Eden’s hands came up to touch his hair and then his neck. He shivered in her arms, moaning. His skin was warm to the touch and smelled of cloves. His hands freed her breasts, and he suckled on a nipple. He reached beneath her skirt, one finger brushing her swollen clit. She screamed as she came. He lifted her into his arms, impaling her on his hastily freed cock. Pressing her back against the cold marble of the crypts, he thrust into her.
Eden felt his cock expand, felt the hot gush of his seed as he orgasmed. With a cry, he buried his face in her throat, sinking his fangs into her flesh. A kaleidoscope of colors flashed behind her closed eyelids as he drained her body of its lifeblood, and she became in truth, the cemetery’s green lady ghost.
October 6th, 2008 at 9:10 am
Hey Lex,
Where’s this cemetery again? ‘Cause I am so not going to be anywhere near this Halloween…or any other, if I can help it. Yikes!
Bryl
October 6th, 2008 at 9:37 am
Bryl - I work at a cemetery in Orange County, CA. There’s a story amongst the staff that the ghost of a lady dressed in green walks the cemetery at night. Since I’m not one to believe in ghosts, I’ve never heard anything else about The Green Lady, why she’s supposedly there, what happened to her, etc. We do have our annual Halloween party on the grounds, but not in the parking lot, although we have done that in the past. There’s a church on the property with a gallery for parties/receptions. We have the Halloween party there. It’s not spooky to me, but then again, i work there.
October 6th, 2008 at 10:36 am
Love it!! I personally think it is to short and you wanted to get more into it. Guess I am used to your genuis now
And if that guy can make someone come that fast I want to know where this place is.
October 6th, 2008 at 11:52 am
Ohhh spooky! When I was a teen I once went through a cemetery on Halloween, it was a freaky experience, but in the end, i got chocolate!
October 6th, 2008 at 11:55 am
Oh Lex… your gift for imagery remains peerless. “Causing heat to pool between her thighs”? How vivid is that! Too bad you only had 500 words to work with… I’d love to have seen how the rest of this played out!
October 6th, 2008 at 12:02 pm
Great Story!
October 6th, 2008 at 12:56 pm
Wow. Incredible story. A very erotic ending, complete with a plunging ending (on both ends of the green lady)
October 6th, 2008 at 1:10 pm
Very well done, Lex. I like this one. And now I have an idea for a costume this year!
October 6th, 2008 at 2:42 pm
Sucks to be her. Hee! *BUT* if you gotta go, that’s a nice way to do it!
October 6th, 2008 at 2:59 pm
Awesome Lex, I can’t believe you were able to get all that through in just 500 words
October 6th, 2008 at 3:31 pm
Excuse me while I make a quick run to the ladies room. (Damn Winter! That was fucking hot!!!!!)
October 6th, 2008 at 5:18 pm
Winter!
You have a genius gift with words, hon! I get so lost in your stories, that I forget I’m reading… it feels like I’m a part of the characters, instead.
I agree with the others — 500 words was just not enough! I want more!
*LOVE* your writing. Thanks for sharing!
October 6th, 2008 at 5:21 pm
Mary & Mojo - Maybe I’ll do a longer version as a Halloween download on lexvalentine.com.
BPR - Going to the cemetery on Halloween is really spooky! But in a good way. And anything for chocolate is my motto!
Ruthie - Glad you liked it! Makes work seem a whole lot different now, doesn’t it? lol
Marty - It was tough to work in the spooky with the erotic in so few words. It was a fun challenge!
Vixen - I wanna see when it’s done! I love costumes!
Dee - If you’re gonna die, in a handsome mans arms while you’re still shaking from the big O is certainly the way to do it!
Avalon - It was tough. Flash fiction is so not my thing, but sometimes it’s good to do something out of your comfort zone.
Tech-Babe - You flatter me. But I like it!
October 6th, 2008 at 8:46 pm
Amber - Thanks so much! If I turn this into something bigger I’ll let you know.
October 6th, 2008 at 9:03 pm
Great story! I agree, too short. You certainly have a talent!! Keep up the good work. Your enjoyment of writing really comes out in your work. Good stuff!
October 6th, 2008 at 9:20 pm
Ok, I almost got a woodie reading this. You do have a way with words.
October 6th, 2008 at 10:22 pm
Great story. Really tight. I love that ending. That’s some really good shit. And the sex… I’m gonna hop on down to Forest Lawn and see if I can find me a Green Lady…
October 6th, 2008 at 10:30 pm
I’m used to your longer works. But I have to say, that for a 500 word story, you really jam packed it with vivid and colorful words, words that made it a come-to-life story. Well done!
October 6th, 2008 at 11:27 pm
Chili - Thanks for the kind words! I appreciate it!
Fab - You best stay away from my other writing then. I don’t need Mrs. Fab getting mad at me!
Jason - GAH! You’d visit the competitor! Noooo!
Thanks for coming by. You’re critiques and opinions are really important to me.
Shiny - I know you wouldn’t lie to me just cause you love me.
Thanks for commenting.
October 7th, 2008 at 2:14 am
WOW!! NOW that is something to wake up too.
October 7th, 2008 at 11:34 am
NICE!!!
October 7th, 2008 at 1:25 pm
Hot, hot, hot!! The author, that is. The story was excellent also. Unlike my fellow critics, I liked the length. There is nothing quite like a good, hot quickie. And it clearly demonstrates Lexie’s versatility in handling the sprints as brilliantly as she does the marathons.
October 7th, 2008 at 2:16 pm
I only counted 496.
October 7th, 2008 at 2:58 pm
Winter
Loved the story. You have such a talent with words that the story came to life easily in my mind as I read it. Spooky and incredibly sexy. I could see myself in the place of Eden. But then I’ve always found vampires incredibly sexy more so than scary. If you do decide to expand this story I definitely want to read more. Keep up the phenominal work.
October 7th, 2008 at 5:18 pm
I love a quick read and that was a hot one.
Great job!
October 7th, 2008 at 6:19 pm
My mamma knows how to WRITE. Hawt stuffs. I feel dirty now. D:
October 7th, 2008 at 6:27 pm
Awesome Winter!!!! Sooooo hot. I love your vamps.
October 7th, 2008 at 6:43 pm
I like the motto! I should get it tattoo’d on me somewhere….
October 7th, 2008 at 6:46 pm
I can’t stop thinking about The Green Lady now. Had to come back again, just to re-read it for a second time!
Winter, you are a FANTASTIC writer. Your stories seriously make me tingly in my naughty bits! Hehe
October 7th, 2008 at 8:22 pm
Now thats a ghost story I won’t be telling the kidlet but maybe the husband
October 7th, 2008 at 10:07 pm
Nice job, Lex! You covered a lot of ground and emotions in just 500 words! Awesome.
October 7th, 2008 at 10:16 pm
Oooh He can sink his…fangs…in to me anytime!
October 7th, 2008 at 11:48 pm
Lex, I loved the story. Such a twist at the end. There are worse ways to die, but still I wonder, would I want to go that way…lol. Nice job! Food for thought.
October 7th, 2008 at 11:48 pm
Grabs you,, hooks you, and makes you want more..Ebil genius you are Winter!!!
October 8th, 2008 at 4:09 am
Incredible! What a twist at the end! Very, very clever, and in less than five hundred words! Awesome!
Amethyst
October 8th, 2008 at 5:09 am
Nice twist, great job! You should definitely do a longer version for Halloween d/l
I also want to know where she got that frock….
October 8th, 2008 at 6:09 am
First it was goosebumps, then an erection, lastly the inclination to avoid cemetaries…BTW do you have Lisa’s addy
October 8th, 2008 at 7:43 am
Awesome Lex! Gave me chills. So that’s how the green lady was born….great story! You covered a lot of ground in a very short time
October 8th, 2008 at 8:00 am
500 words well spent. Quickies aren’t usually my cup of tea, but this was a few minutes well spent.
October 8th, 2008 at 11:15 am
Outstanding Lex! Made me wish for younger days….
October 8th, 2008 at 1:49 pm
This piece rocked…well done…
October 8th, 2008 at 6:45 pm
I liked everything but the first paragraph.The cemetery staff held their annual Halloween carnival on the 31st because it fell on a Saturday. The cemetery was closed,(why was it closed on a saturday?, maybe because it was after-hours?) but the parking lot was decorated with spooky props. Costumed people were laughing(why were they laughing?..was the food funny..or were they in a drunken state?) and partaking of carnival food like corndogs. In the distance, the faint glow of the headstones seemed like part of the décor. (the headstones are part of the decor.. in a cemetery , aren’t they?)
But the rest was great.. especially the parts about the breasts and nipples etc..lol
Great ideas.
October 9th, 2008 at 12:53 am
Ooooh, scary sexy! Although, as someone else commented, I won’t be going anywhere near that or any cemetary. However, I would like her costume!
Beautifully written!
October 9th, 2008 at 1:15 pm
Man, this is my kind of sex. “Who are you?”/orgasm/orgasm/dead/NEXT!!! Win/win as far as I’m concerned!
(btw, I agree with a previous poster on the first paragraph. Reading it felt like words were left out. I’m guessing due to length restrictions)
Oh, and the next time I meet someone and they ask me who I am, I’m going to answer “The answer to your prayers, lady,” and see what happens. I’m guessing an onslaught of lust (but that’s just a guess).
October 9th, 2008 at 10:35 pm
Lex: Thanks for the hot, steamy quickie!! It was wonderful! Would love to see a compendium of short quickies…
October 11th, 2008 at 1:43 pm
oh wow you really did good…I so loved it
October 13th, 2008 at 9:43 am
Have to agree with Greg. That’s my kind of quickie.
Very nice.
October 14th, 2008 at 4:54 pm
Awesome story, Lex! would love to read more, defo!
October 15th, 2008 at 8:39 am
Oh my….. what a way to GO!!!!
Wonderful story lex!!!
October 16th, 2008 at 2:11 pm
Very good. I’d have thought a Vampire would have had a little more staying power but I guess if you’ve got a bit of worry about the sun catching you, you might have to rush it.
October 18th, 2008 at 11:09 pm
Nicely done and to the point. Quickies are fine when they get the job done, and this gets it done. Bravo, Lex.
October 29th, 2008 at 5:16 pm
Can we apply for you to be awarded a 500 word extension?
Hungrily awaiting the next part…
Livvy xxx
October 29th, 2008 at 9:55 pm
guess that taught her not to tempt the fates. great! now there will be two lady’s in green.