Dance with the Devil
By Tess MacKall
I am the devil. She is earth bound and little does she know—Hell bound. I’m not in love, that’s impossible, but I’ll admit to obsession—lust.
Those are sins aren’t they? Ha! Of course they are, you stupid fool.
I’ve been here forever, lolling in the fire and brimstone. My kingdom is glorious. Flames worship at my feet, and when she is my queen, those same wisps of fire shall bow down to her.
Not once have I ever contemplated a consort. Oh, I’ve fucked—littered the earth with my offspring as a matter of fact, but now I find myself in need of more. I’m branching out you see. The universe is a wide open space and I have souls to corrupt. My minions need discipline—someone to crack the whip. That’s where she figures into the grand scheme.
Under my tutelage, her days shall be filled with inflicting pain and directing my
followers on their raids to the mortal world. While I conquer new frontiers she’ll remain behind, keeping the home fires burning.
Look at her. Isn’t she a tempting morsel? Her perfect green eyes shine with pitiful hope. She’s only allowed me a few kisses thus far, but tonight is All Hallows Eve, and at the stroke of midnight all free will is suspended for a mere second. And that’s when she’ll become my queen, and join me in the Netherworld.
I tap her on the shoulder. She turns and her eyes sparkle at the sight of me.
“Luke! I’ve been so worried.”
“No need. I’m here now. My love, you are absolutely breathtaking.”
She pirouettes, the chiffon layers of her angel costume billow outward. The wings, trimmed in gold, flutter slightly. We make the perfect couple—I in my redskin, complete with tail and horns for those mortals who prefer this version of me, and her all in white, pale blonde hair cascading down her back. Opposites do attract.
I offer my hand and she takes it. I guide her slowly to the dance floor. The strains of a waltz begin and I hold her close, planting little kisses along her throat. Damn, but I need to taste her.
The irony is quite amusing—me, Lord of Darkness attending a charity ball. Midnight can’t come quick enough. She laughs and waves to another couple. I watch the clock. It strikes. Only seconds remain of her living soul.
The eleventh chime ceases our dance. She stares at me with her love-struck eyes. My hand raises, my fingers sprout talons. Her scream reverberates. Onlookers join the delightful chorus. I’ve always wanted to bottle that sound. Someday I will.
Her voice cries out, “What are you?”
“Your lover for eternity,” I reply, my fetid breath bathing her face.
In the space of that one second, I reach down, lash through the layers of her flesh and scoop out her heart. My vortex of blackness envelopes us, and we descend into the fiery pit of the Kingdom of Hell.
October 17th, 2008 at 4:54 pm
That was ummm, intense! And very good!
October 17th, 2008 at 10:09 pm
Great story Tess! You are one wicked wahine!
xo
October 18th, 2008 at 2:56 pm
Very nice! I want to know more about the devil. Love those bad boys.
October 18th, 2008 at 3:00 pm
Whoa, Tess! *pant* *pant* *pant*
Hummm, you need to keep writing like this. Best cardiovascular work out my old body has had in a long time.
October 18th, 2008 at 3:07 pm
For a first try at horror, this is really good. Keep it up.
October 18th, 2008 at 3:18 pm
Great story Tess, you rocked it
October 18th, 2008 at 4:51 pm
You hit the nail on the head with this one Tess!
October 18th, 2008 at 9:22 pm
Oh wow! Way to go Tess. Love how it ended. Wonder she’s going to think when she realizes where she’s going to spend out the rest of eternity. Probably not going to be a pretty sight. ^_^ Great job. I’d love to see more.
October 19th, 2008 at 12:58 am
I’m not a big fan of gore, but I do like this story. Nice use of the present tense too…Good job!
October 19th, 2008 at 5:59 am
Ooo… Very nice! Loved it!
October 19th, 2008 at 7:45 am
Wickedly engaging with tentacle flair! So love the way it envelopes you in the contrast of both eerie and beauty. This one surely crawls up the spine and slithers through you. Excellent write Tess!!! ~WOW~
October 19th, 2008 at 3:03 pm
Tricia,
Intense was exactly the mood I was shooting for. Thank you so much for reading.
October 19th, 2008 at 3:03 pm
Well you know me, AJ, wicked is my middle name. lol
Thanks for reading, hon.
October 19th, 2008 at 3:04 pm
Thank you Lizzie. I love my bad boys too and they don’t get any badder than the devil himself do they? hmmmm…maybe I met him once or twice now that I think about it, or at least his brother. lol
October 19th, 2008 at 3:05 pm
Dr. Karl,
Watch that heart muscle. We don’t want to give it too much of a bump! Save it for Sweetie and exercise it with her and you know what I mean. wink
October 19th, 2008 at 3:06 pm
Awww, Mary, Thank you so much. I’m glad you thought it was good. Not sure I could keep up with the devil though. lol
October 19th, 2008 at 3:07 pm
Thanks for stopping by, Savannah! So glad you think I rocked it. I love Halloween. Can’t wait for your big annual Halloween Bash on your yahoo group too.
October 19th, 2008 at 3:08 pm
Thank you, Kensana. I’m glad you think it was right on the money. Writing horror is not easy at all. This was my first try. So I was a bit nervous about it.
October 19th, 2008 at 3:09 pm
Oh Beth! Now you know there are going to be some blood curdling, spine chilling, toe curling screams once that Angel sees the Master Bedroom. lol
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment!
October 19th, 2008 at 3:11 pm
Bryl Tyne,
I’m not a fan of gore either. I simply went with what I felt at the time. It’s funny how our characters decide where the story goes. And thank you for the comment on first person present. I normally write third, subjective or first person past, but this one screamed for first person present. Thanks again!
October 19th, 2008 at 3:12 pm
Awww, Jade, thank you so much. I’m so glad you liked it. I hope you and baby are doing well.
Big Hug!
October 19th, 2008 at 3:14 pm
Ahhhhh! AnneMarie, you spotted the contrast. Great eye. Thanks so much for stopping in for the read. I’m thrilled you liked it. And WOW to your compliments. Means so much to me.
Big Hug!
October 19th, 2008 at 7:10 pm
This is awesome. I love macabre and horror stories. You did your writing proud girl! I so want to read more…
Kissa
October 19th, 2008 at 8:26 pm
Wow, if you’re going to be with the devil, why be left at home?
October 19th, 2008 at 8:34 pm
lol That’s a hoot, Savanna.
I’m not so sure Angel is going to like leaving home. But, if you dance with the devil, be careful you don’t get burned!
October 20th, 2008 at 10:05 am
Awww, thanks, Kissa. Glad to see a fan of the macabre. I’ve never even watched a horror movie. lol
I’m scared of my own shadow. Maybe you can finish this one for me. lol I’m too scared! lol
Big Hug!
October 20th, 2008 at 11:13 am
OHHHHHHHHHHH me likey!! keep up!!! and i read the celb blog today too Tess I sooooooo agreee with you! finally someone besides me doesnt wanna see celb cammando LOL
October 20th, 2008 at 1:01 pm
Thanks for the read, Tina. I’ll definitely keep it up. lol
Yep, celeb buzz gets on my nerves for sure. Glad you agree.
October 21st, 2008 at 4:12 pm
Fabulous Tess! Very intense. I want to read more
October 22nd, 2008 at 7:09 am
Hi Eliza,
Thanks for reading. I really wanted intense, but horror is not something I’ve ever done. So I’m glad you feel the intensity. Thanks so much. Not sure there will be more though. lol
October 26th, 2008 at 2:01 pm
What a fierce edge to this, Tess. I love the mixture of urbane sophistication and raw, harsh sexual heat. Not an easy balance to achieve, but you do it with remarkable style. Great work.
yours,
R
October 26th, 2008 at 6:37 pm
Thank you so much, R. I guess we’ve been thinking about each other today. I visited your myspace page earlier. Love the new avatar pic. And your erotic novel excerpt was absolutely superb. I intend to read it again before commenting. You know how I am. I’ve got to analyze it before I do. lol
Big Hug,
Tess
October 27th, 2008 at 9:02 am
Wow Tess! This is really different. Great story!
October 27th, 2008 at 9:35 am
Wow, Tess, that was great!!!!!!
October 27th, 2008 at 11:25 am
Thanks, Barb. It is definitely different!
October 27th, 2008 at 11:26 am
Glad you enjoyed it, Lil. Thanks for commenting!
October 27th, 2008 at 12:09 pm
Great story Tess!
October 27th, 2008 at 12:32 pm
Ava Rose! Where have you been girl? Good to see you here. Thanks for the comment!
October 27th, 2008 at 2:31 pm
Very intense - love the voice
October 27th, 2008 at 3:21 pm
wow , what an ending It is a very great story.
October 27th, 2008 at 5:24 pm
Thanks, Pat. I’m so glad you liked it. It’s so difficult to create a beginning, middle, and end in five hundred words. But it looks like all the entries here on the Seven Wicked Writers blog did a fabulous job of it.
October 28th, 2008 at 6:22 am
Tammie, thank you so much for stopping by and reading. I can’t wait to get back to a Night Owl Chat next month. My new release will need you, badly. lol Thanks again.
October 28th, 2008 at 6:51 am
Awesome, Tess! You’re the best!!
October 28th, 2008 at 10:42 am
LA…so happy you stopped by. I can’t wait to read your first print book. I’ll pop it up on the computer today and check it out. But I’ve definitely got to order it so everyone in my family will know that I know you. lol
October 31st, 2008 at 9:28 am
Great story, Tess! Sent chills up my spine!
October 31st, 2008 at 1:43 pm
Caitlyn! I have been thinking about you for days.
I’m going to email you. I’m so glad you stopped by and commented. Thanks!
November 3rd, 2008 at 3:29 pm
Great story left me wanting more…
Blessed Be,
Leigh Savage
December 12th, 2008 at 7:00 pm
Tess, now that one is wild as hell, remind me to and will send the horror,I was working on for a bit, if you want.